Balance
October 15th, 2007 by 
dani
I
lose
balance
tottering
(a baby’s first steps)
listing between what I feel and
what it is you want me to feel
A funambulist
walking a
tightrope
to
you
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October 15th, 2007 by dani
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October 15th, 2007 at 10:21 pm
That’s a big thought! Love it!
October 16th, 2007 at 3:58 am
Very nice! I like the sort of mirror effect and it ultimately balancing on its “tip.”
October 16th, 2007 at 9:22 am
I love this, both for what it says and for the balance in the form
October 16th, 2007 at 1:55 pm
i must wonder if the journey will be worth the effort in the end…..
October 16th, 2007 at 3:26 pm
Nice one - I love the central notion of the difference between oneself and another. And obviously well done on letting the form support and not stifle the words.
October 16th, 2007 at 9:11 pm
Oh, now this works! Very nice.
October 16th, 2007 at 9:20 pm
honestly, this is a work of brilliance. the balance of both the image you create, and the form of a fib/reverse fib is perfect, and to say so much in such a structured form is amazing. simply wonderful!
October 17th, 2007 at 3:31 pm
Beautiful!
October 18th, 2007 at 1:54 pm
i love the balance of your words & their placement.
October 19th, 2007 at 9:10 pm
Your words and their placement are spot on. Beautifully done.