Sea Tanka
dani
My body kissed by
burning rays and chilling waves,
abrasive sand and
gentle breeze, in ecstasy,
I lick the salt from my lips.
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13 Comments »
dani
My body kissed by
burning rays and chilling waves,
abrasive sand and
gentle breeze, in ecstasy,
I lick the salt from my lips.
Posted in Haiku |
13 Comments »
May 1st, 2007 at 2:54 pm
Wow- this was so visceral! I love all the opposites of burning and chilling and abrasive and gentle- very nice!
May 1st, 2007 at 9:59 pm
Sounds like you had a good time!
May 1st, 2007 at 11:43 pm
Really lovely poem!
May 2nd, 2007 at 12:46 am
Oh, I love this, the way you describe all the extremes of feeling and experience, and all leading to ecstasy! Well done
May 2nd, 2007 at 2:00 am
Ah yes, I do admire the way you’ve described the sensual, sublime experience of being at the shore.
May 5th, 2007 at 2:55 pm
Great poem. I love the imagery!
May 5th, 2007 at 7:24 pm
I was convinced I had already commented on this. Perhaps my comment is still awaiting moderation? Anyway, I really enjoyed this, I love the contrasts.
May 5th, 2007 at 8:46 pm
v.good
well, i liked it anyway…
May 6th, 2007 at 1:35 am
Beautiful.
May 6th, 2007 at 2:27 am
The contrasts were wonderful.
May 6th, 2007 at 9:46 am
love this!
May 6th, 2007 at 1:31 pm
powerful
May 6th, 2007 at 3:15 pm
Brilliant. Does so well for both prompts.