Undertow
May 5th, 2007 by 
dani
I could fight this current, battle relentlessly until exhaustion sets in.
I could try to deviate from its set path, methodically sidestep destiny
in hopes of escaping its grasp and being carried back to shore.
I could dive deep to see what cold-blooded thing lives underneath.
I could pray for a miracle and redemption at heaven’s gate.
Or I could just float out to sea and enjoy the ride while waving good-bye.
Posted in Poetry | 
May 5th, 2007 at 10:40 pm
Eeeck! What a warning sign! Just watch my dust, baby!
Oh, and a cool poem, Dani…:)
May 6th, 2007 at 9:08 am
My goodness, what dangerous sea!
May 6th, 2007 at 10:42 am
oooh, very spooky! love the imagery!
May 6th, 2007 at 11:43 am
all the possibilities for handling the undertow of life…beautifully and thoughtfully written
May 6th, 2007 at 6:24 pm
Interesting take on the prompt - and on life! Powerful poem!
May 6th, 2007 at 6:32 pm
Excellent. Love the thought of “enjoying the ride while waving good bye.” It always astonishes me the number of people who think those warnings are not meant for them.
May 6th, 2007 at 7:24 pm
There are many days when I’d like to just ride that last wave out….and goodbye.
May 6th, 2007 at 10:12 pm
love the poem. Sometimes it’s best to just submit.
May 7th, 2007 at 2:01 pm
Really like this.
December 6th, 2007 at 3:00 pm
This does fit this week’s TOP prompt, and I missed it first time around.
So glad you pointed it out.
December 6th, 2007 at 5:30 pm
and i could just stay the hell out of the water!!!! very nice!!!!
December 6th, 2007 at 7:00 pm
Wicked sign and a great metaphor. I wonder if the ice floes carried similar warnings? Nice poem!!
December 7th, 2007 at 4:36 am
Very nice ending. I like the unexpected twist of tone.
December 7th, 2007 at 10:23 am
I guess if you lose someone while visiting there you just add a hash-mark on your way out.
December 8th, 2007 at 1:52 pm
This reminded me of the rip tide in front of our house the winter we spent in Hawaii. I got caught in it once and didn’t even realize it until my husband and mother-in-law started screaming at me. It was so tempting to just keep on floating…
Very effective poem!
December 8th, 2007 at 8:32 pm
Very powerful!
December 8th, 2007 at 10:34 pm
Scary stuff! I guess I’d have to take the last option…