Comments on: Undertow

By: SweetTalkingGuy

SweetTalkingGuy — Sat, 08 Dec 2007 21:34:41 +0000

Scary stuff! I guess I’d have to take the last option…

By: Mad Kane

Mad Kane — Sat, 08 Dec 2007 19:32:20 +0000

Very powerful!

By: Linda Jacobs

Linda Jacobs — Sat, 08 Dec 2007 12:52:26 +0000

This reminded me of the rip tide in front of our house the winter we spent in Hawaii. I got caught in it once and didn’t even realize it until my husband and mother-in-law started screaming at me. It was so tempting to just keep on floating…

Very effective poem!

By: Rob Kistner

Rob Kistner — Fri, 07 Dec 2007 09:23:11 +0000

I guess if you lose someone while visiting there you just add a hash-mark on your way out.

By: Mike McCulley

Mike McCulley — Fri, 07 Dec 2007 03:36:37 +0000

Very nice ending. I like the unexpected twist of tone.

By: Tumblewords

Tumblewords — Thu, 06 Dec 2007 18:00:24 +0000

Wicked sign and a great metaphor. I wonder if the ice floes carried similar warnings? Nice poem!!

By: paisley

paisley — Thu, 06 Dec 2007 16:30:56 +0000

and i could just stay the hell out of the water!!!! very nice!!!!

By: ...deb

...deb — Thu, 06 Dec 2007 14:00:40 +0000

This does fit this week’s TOP prompt, and I missed it first time around.

So glad you pointed it out.

By: Deb G

Deb G — Mon, 07 May 2007 13:01:17 +0000

Really like this.

By: Rena

Rena — Sun, 06 May 2007 21:12:15 +0000

love the poem. Sometimes it’s best to just submit.